My Attempt on 26 Custom Cards! *UNOFFICIAL SET*

My comments will relate to the wording of the powers you have chosen, to try to avoid wording that can be interpreted in more than one way. If a is unclear, it may need to be reworded, or I may comment on a situation that might arise and not have an obvious answer the way the is written.

I do agree that it would be more consistent with the base game to label them as Squad Creatures rather then Creature Type


Penumbric Manifestation
Since it is your opponent's turn when the Wurm is defeated the first time, is the Wurm immediately returned to the map? This is then allowing the defender to interrupt the attacking player's turn, which does not happen very much. Suppose the opponent is attacking with the first figure in a squad and defeats the Wurm. Is it re-summoned before the remaining enemy squad figures are activated? It looks like it could be resummoned to the exact space where it was just defeated. As long as that is your intent, the wording is OK I guess.

Deadly Regeneration:
In a muptiplayer game, this currently reads that after each and every opponent turn, the Hydra removes all damage counters and adds a counter.
I think that there may need to be a cap on the number of counters that can be added to the card.

Bloodthirst:
I think that there may need to be a cap on the number of counters that can be added to the card.

Rorix Bladwewing
Haste:
You might want to add Attack with this Rorox Bladewing unless this is a unique figure.

Devour:
I think that there may need to be a cap on the number of counters that can be added to the card.

Tidal Wave:
This removes all figures except PWs. All PW's (including the caster) get the 2 sword attack.  All players are affected, right?

With the Current:
Perhaps a distance for clear sight summoning distance would be helpful.  Right now it is almost anywhere on the map.

Vanishing:
I understand sacrifice, but I do not think it is currently used on any official card for the game. Destroy or Return to Graveyard are AotP terms.  When adding a new term it is easy to question since it has not previously been defined for this game.

Protection from Demons and Dragons:
(typo) a Demon for Dragon figure should be a Demon or Dragon figure

Soulbond
(typo) 3 line from bottom - souldbonded

Wither
When Midnight Banshee deals combat damage to a figure, that figure gains gains -1 for each damage dealt until the end of their next turn
- I'm a bit confused by this one. Does it mean this?
When Midnight Banshee deals combat damage to an enemy figure, that enemy figure gains gains -1 for each damage dealt until the end of that enemy figure's next turn
 - or this?
When Midnight Banshee deals combat damage to an enemy figure, that enemy figure gains gains -1 for each damage dealt until the end of that enemy's next turn

Blink into the Abyss
Perhaps reword
 - Instead of moving or attacking normally, you may...
since movement always happens before an attack (even a movement of Zero is movement)
 - Before moving, you may...

Demonic Price
It sounds like this occurs at the beginning of the turn, pretty much right after drawing a card from your library, and happens every turn that the Persecutor is on the board. On a 4 or less, you would not be able activate any other squad or PW; instead, your opponent can attack you.

Proximity Response
pretty big number possible in a multiplayer game 25 or more attack would be possible. (4 players with 6 squad figures summoned plus PWs)

Thran Emblazoned Golem
Gets both and if summoned by Kiora, right?

Opalescence Sentinels
Hard to understand.
What is permanently activate Normally?
Does the +2 defense only apply when being attacked by the squad that was summoned that caused the to activate?

Thran Defenses
When enchanted
- I guess this means when an enchant spell is played on this card? Does this continue as long as it is enchanted and it ends if the enchantment is removed?

Indestructible Will
Is this supposed to apply to all creatures, artifacts and enchantments on the board, or just those that apply to player controliing Elspeth?

Cruel Betrayal
Sacrifice used again as a descriptor
I'm personally not a fan of a that requires so much bookkeeping - there might be 6 or 8 figures within 4 spaces. The does not affect the card/squad, but the individual figures. Very easy to lose track of exactly who all is affected as play moves around the table.

Deul Casting
Do you mean Dual Casting
cast it on a new target
- perhaps could be -
cast it on a target of her choosing

Yawgmoth
He is not a PW but something else? Play him like the Eldrazi Ruiner?
Timeless Knowledge
300 spell points - Probably not the best Idea to specify the point value. What if the next expansion changes the starting deck count or point value.
Yawgmoth counts as part of any unit he summons
- what move/life/attack/defense values does he use - his or those of the squad when he is part of the unit he summoned?

Endless invasion
For each FIGURE in the graveyard, roll a 20. On 16 or higher return this CARD to your reserves
- figures may be in the graveyard but the card may still be in play. Also allows for multiple chances to return a card to play if a 3 figure squad is all in the graveyard.  Roll the die 3 times, once for each figure.

Sangromancic Posession
this unit becomes under your control and activates with Sorin as part of a creature squad with him.
Does it only activate with Sorin? or with a Squad? Which squad? What stats does the figure use, its own or that of the new squad?
I'm very confused

Inspiring Presence
target figure card gains first strike.
are we to choose a target figure? or to target a figure? or do we target a card? or choose a card? Apply to the whole card? to just one figure? The wording here could be improved.

Planar Jump
At the start of your movement phase (This means you have already selected which army card will be activated)
Since this is the of the PW, the PW has already been selected. How can some other figure now be activated?
The concept of the is probably OK, but the wording does not really describe the very well. I think the would allow you to select your PW and move figures from a different card. I think it applies only to movement and not to combat. I think the PW would not be allowed to move on a turn if this is activated.

Naturalize
What does Exile mean. It is not used with any official card or army.

Thanks for posting your cards.  there are many very interesting ideas here.

Oh, Targanth, one more thing, The Hydra Army card works the same way as the MTG cards work, and the wording is exactly how you think it sounds.  There is no cap, which is quite intentional...  Hydras in Magic the Gathering, when wounded, completely heal and become exponentially stronger (with the exception of a few cards).  This is the theme I was going for!  Although, if this is the case, maybe his starting strength should be at 3 rather than 4...

Thanks again!